Looks good! Added color brings a little balance to the overall composition. White bubbles in the middle look unfinished in comparison to yours. Definitely lives up to the OP's request:
Quoted from MtnFrost:Remember, you have to suggest what you think would have been a better solution,
Now if anyone has a problem with the actual linework/drawing on Olympic Hockey, you're out of your mind. That backglass belongs in a modern art museum.